in class we had 40 minutes to write a story that happened in the weekend
and I was stuck at home with my sister and her baby
I was just at home doing nothing, really just watching tv. But my older sister said I have to watch her baby
While she goes to the toilet and. She took for very long time then I started to get a little bit annoyed
But the baby started to cry so she had to hurry up
And she finally came out to feed her but it was just
Us home because everyone was at my brothers rugby game but it was almost dinner time so we just had
Boil up from last night it was so good so then i just
Went back to watching watching tv then everybody
Came back and took the tv to watch movies all night
And then just played on my phone for the rest of the
Night and nothing else exciting happened.
Hi Israel, I enjoyed reading this. As you add detail to the most interesting part (feeling stuck with a small child) this recount will become quite interesting. As you edit, also think when do you naturally pause? Pop in the full stops.
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